Hey there Eon. Some feedback - Here's what I think you should work on:
-The scene is too symmetrical. I know you were aiming for a POV, but trust me, it's much more interesting to have the camera at an angle to one side.
-Her arms and the dick needs more animation. It doesn't have to be wild flailing, just a a hint of movement to make them seem less like static objects, and more actual parts of living people.
Definitely not a bad firstie.